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Final Eight updated - The Phantom Librarian
Spewing out too many words since November 2003
fernwithy
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Final Eight updated
I did the edits on F8, and I think I got everything that was contradicted later on (though the timeline struck me as muddy... I think it all fits).

Anyway, here 'tis.
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From: queen_bellatrix Date: December 18th, 2014 12:36 am (UTC) (Link)

Chapter Order Trouble

Not sure if this happened when you were uploading, or if it's AO3 wierdness, but wanted to let you know nonetheless:

Chapter 1 actually contains the chapter summary and text for Chapter 3.

Then, two is fine, but of course, three then contains four etc. etc., with their being no chapter 1.:)

And wow, to have done the editing/proofing for that many chapters in such a short time *tips hat* You are a quick lady indeed!
fernwithy From: fernwithy Date: December 18th, 2014 02:09 am (UTC) (Link)

Re: Chapter Order Trouble

Ack. I can't do anything for another couple of hours. I tried to be all tricksy and bring it back to the top of the list by deleting and replacing a chapter -- which worked -- but for some reason, it messed up the existing chapters!
fernwithy From: fernwithy Date: December 18th, 2014 03:43 am (UTC) (Link)

Re: Chapter Order Trouble

This one wasn't too bad on the inconsistencies. The ones in Haymitch's POV will be a bear to make emotionally consistent, since of course, most of the things he mentions briefly are things that I went back and filled out... and no longer can be casually brushed aside with a brief mention. Oops!
From: queen_bellatrix Date: December 18th, 2014 05:19 am (UTC) (Link)

Re: Chapter Order Trouble

Can't be of much help with the emotional notes because yeah, I imagine you'll have to do some pretty major rewrites for some of that.:)

But, on the continuity front, some things to be on the lookout for when you're doing GM:

There're a couple of times where you refer to Blight as Blight Lawrence, rather than Hedge. There's also a scene in the Capitol where Haymitch/Blight have one last drink; it was just a throw-away scene originally, but considering there shared history, you may want to give that more weight?

There's a mention in GM that, along with pulling his teeth (Haymitch thinks that happened in his original prep, when it actually happened in the interview one, but that can be accounted for by time passing easily enough.), they also had to call in experts to clear up an infection in his eyes. That's never mentioned in EOTW, so maybe just leave it at the teeth?

GM is where the different Games number for Mags is given (the eleventh instead of the seventh when they're watching her tape), so you'll want to be on the alert for that.

I also found the bit where Haymitch refers to how long Beckett was in the District. His original count was three years; it's just after Thread says that if Gail poaches again, he'll be shot, and Haymitch says that a lot of people were shot in the three years after his Games. In actuality, with the HT timeline, she leaves after Merl/Kay's wedding, which takes place, from what I could tell, after the 55th Games. (It may take place just before, but it definitely takes place in the year of the 55th.) So, she came in the year of the quell, which would put her there for about six years?

And Effie; the numbers around Effie's employment get a bit skewed in GM. We know she took over at the 59th, so, counting that as her first, it seems that the 75th would actually be her seventeenth Games, which means she's been with Haymitch for the last sixteen? Since you give several different numbers in the fic, just trying to give you some to reference back too.

Oh, and just after Chaff kisses Katniss, when he's referencing how Chaff kissed some of the other Victors, he says that he didn't find out what was happening to Finn until the 70th with the mut attack, but he seemed pretty clear what was going on at the 67th, when Finn was first with the actress etc. etc. So you may have to revise that bit.

That's all I'm coming up with at the moment, but I'll comment if I remember anything else in the next few days.
From: (Anonymous) Date: December 18th, 2014 04:53 am (UTC) (Link)

Re: Chapter Order Trouble

Ch. 2 has become Ch. 1, and Ch. 1 has become Ch. 2.

That is, Ch. 2 talks about Peeta being in the mud and Madge writing a subversive poem; and in Ch. 1, Peeta is out of the mud and someone compliments Madge on the poem.

-- Tom
fernwithy From: fernwithy Date: December 18th, 2014 04:56 am (UTC) (Link)

Re: Chapter Order Trouble

Again? I just fixed that!
From: queen_bellatrix Date: December 18th, 2014 05:01 am (UTC) (Link)

Re: Chapter Order Trouble

Not sure if you just fixed again already, but it looked fine when I just looked *is confused*
From: (Anonymous) Date: December 18th, 2014 05:08 am (UTC) (Link)

Re: Chapter Order Trouble

D'Oh! You indeed fixed it. Secure from Red Alert.
fernwithy From: fernwithy Date: December 18th, 2014 05:13 am (UTC) (Link)

Re: Chapter Order Trouble

Phew, good. :embarrassment:
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