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National Poetry Month, 4/22--I feel like writing one - The Phantom Librarian
Spewing out too many words since November 2003
fernwithy
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National Poetry Month, 4/22--I feel like writing one
Hmmm. Not sure what it's going to be yet. But starting on the 22nd, so I can keep my entries constant (priorities, you know).

Oh, btw, I reported that horizontal scroll issue, and LJ said to upgrade to the current Firefox; it seems to be working so far.

Hmmm.

Forty minutes and a shower later...

I was going to write something long and huge, but I guess not tonight. Just not in a two-hundred line narrative frame of mind (and besides, I'm finally back to work on "Of A Sort," which means I'm writing a whole lot of narrative). So, maybe just a sonnet. When in search of a subject, fairy tales are a good place to start.

"Ella of the Ashes"

She sits among the cinders, gaunt and grim,
A ghost of ash, a dust of burning frost.
And in her heart a melancholy hymn
To mark the precious world that she has lost

For something stood here once upon a time--
Her heart can sense its long-forgotten shape--
And when the midnight bells begin to chime
It touches her and whispers of escape.

In dreams she walks the halls that are her own
A vanished world, and she, its kindly queen;
But morning shows the shattered, empty throne
And daylight passes high above, unseen.

At night, she makes her unheard moonlit plea,
Then sleeps upon her ashen legacy.

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harriet_wimsey From: harriet_wimsey Date: April 23rd, 2006 04:48 am (UTC) (Link)
I love sonnets, so I'm biased in your favor anyway, but I really like this. I liked the image of the long-forgotten shape, picking up her old dreams and also the contents of the fireplace burned into shapeless ash. Nice job.
fernwithy From: fernwithy Date: April 23rd, 2006 05:08 am (UTC) (Link)
Thank you. :) I like sonnets, too. Fourteen lines, in-out-done. ;) No, seriously, it's a nice length and form.
sue_parsons From: sue_parsons Date: April 23rd, 2006 05:21 am (UTC) (Link)
The vision that formed in my mind as I read this was of a metal figurine left in the wake of a natural disaster. Then, for some reason, I got the image of The Statue of Liberty standing vigil over the ruins of The Twin Towers. I know you said you were thinking of a fairy tale, but I was locked in a more recent timeframe when I read this.
fernwithy From: fernwithy Date: April 23rd, 2006 05:24 am (UTC) (Link)
Oh, I like the idea of Lady Liberty as Cinderella, now that you mention it.
hermia7 From: hermia7 Date: April 23rd, 2006 05:46 am (UTC) (Link)

(off topic)

I'm finally back to work on "Of A Sort,"
Yay!!
fernwithy From: fernwithy Date: April 23rd, 2006 05:10 pm (UTC) (Link)

Re: (off topic)

Yeah, I'm settling into Hermione's voice. It's kind of fun. :)
matril From: matril Date: April 23rd, 2006 01:55 pm (UTC) (Link)
Very nice. Gives the Cinderella tale the sort of poignance it deserves. I like how you include both the parts of her French name and the "ashen" from the German "Aschenputtel."
fernwithy From: fernwithy Date: April 23rd, 2006 05:10 pm (UTC) (Link)
I almost named it Ashenputtel.
willowbough From: willowbough Date: April 23rd, 2006 02:21 pm (UTC) (Link)


Nicely done. It reminds me of Jane Yolen's comment that Cinderella is not so much a story of rags to riches, but of riches regained and a disempowered heroine restored to her rightful status.
fernwithy From: fernwithy Date: April 23rd, 2006 05:11 pm (UTC) (Link)
A comment which I want to etch in stone over the head of any who calls rags-to-riches a "Cinderella story"! :D
austenrowling From: austenrowling Date: April 23rd, 2006 04:28 pm (UTC) (Link)
wow! That is a really good poem.
fernwithy From: fernwithy Date: April 23rd, 2006 05:11 pm (UTC) (Link)
Thanks!
lady_moriel From: lady_moriel Date: April 23rd, 2006 05:01 pm (UTC) (Link)
Oh, that's really lovely...suddenly I want to try my hand at writing a sonnet. :p

As for Firefox, what version are you using? Mine hasn't offered me any updates in quite a while.
fernwithy From: fernwithy Date: April 23rd, 2006 05:12 pm (UTC) (Link)
Version 1.5.0.2--maybe what fixes it is the process of reinstalling!

Anyway, yeah, sonnets are fun. This is an English version; Petrarchan is also pretty good.
erised1810 From: erised1810 Date: April 23rd, 2006 06:57 pm (UTC) (Link)
wow..thas' yyour best. orthe besto f yorus' ive read as I had yo uon my flist. heee.
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