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Spewing out too many words since November 2003
fernwithy
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Shifts POV poll
Well, like I mentioned in the comments on the last "Shifts" post, I'm at a critical point as far as deciding the point-of-view structure of "Shifts." Because of the nature of lycanthropy, lunar cycles are the most natural way to split it if I do so. The next post is going to be several scenelets from minor points-of-view, but after that, if I go back to Remus, I'm determining that it will be Remus throughout. If I'm going to start switching, that will be when it has to be done. (ETA: I just realized, I have to make the decision before I write the next post, as, if I don't opt to add Dora and/or Sirius as POV characters, their voices will definitely need to be in the stew.)


First off, I have a poll because, well, I felt like it, but the truth is, I'd just like some feedback--ultimately, the story will decide. But I have a lot of voices babbling in my head, and it would help to get some feedback to sort them out, so if you have any comments, I would very much like to hear them.

So, these are the ideas I'm thinking of:

Stick with Remus. The advantage here is focus, and it also mirrorst he HP books, which of course are solely in Harry's POV. I can follow the Dudley/Smeltings plot closely and go straight through to the end in the voice I started with. The disadvantage is that Remus gets very wrapped up in his own assignment (since it's what he'd rather be doing anyway), and we're blocked from seeing anything he doesn't see.

Add only Dora. The advantage is that as an Auror, she'll get to see a lot that happens at the Ministry. Also, as the other half of the romance plot, such as it is, she does have some observations about it and about Remus. The disadvantage is that it would break out of a canon style structure, not to mention fueling the impression that yrs truly just can't write a whole HP story without looking out through Tonks's eyes. ;)

Add only Sirius. The advantage is that it's a neat contrast--Remus, whose life is opening up, whose possibilities are starting to appear, contrasted with Sirius, whose world is closing down claustrophobically, and whose possibilities are leading to an abrupt end. It also gets a chance to see what's happening with him as his contacts with Harry become more and more important to him. The disadvantage is that this is totally literary and not very plot-driven, because the huge disadvantage is that Sirius's world is claustrophobic, and he gets nothing that's not brought inside Number 12.

Add Sirius and Dora. If I add, this seems like the most likely way to me--alternating cycle by cycle, a la The Stand, going to Remus, then to Dora, then back to Remus, then to Dora, then to Sirius, then back to Remus, etc, finally ending with the last lunar cycle narrated by all three of them in turn. The advantage would be adding these other points of view. The disadvantage (as is true with both the individual adds) is that it will be easy to go off track and lose the through-line, because Sirius doesn't give a rip about Dudley and Tonks has a lot of other pots on the stove.

Anyway, feedback would be appreciated.


Poll #310852 Shifts POV poll

Should I alternate the points of view in Shifts?

No. Leaving it at Remus's mirrors the books' style and keeps things focused
9(52.9%)
Yes--add Dora's.
1(5.9%)
Yes--add Sirius's.
0(0.0%)
Yes--add both.
7(41.2%)


ETA: I voted, but only because I didn't feel like clicking through two links to see the result, so I went with the majority at the time I voted.
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From: anatomiste Date: June 20th, 2004 08:27 pm (UTC) (Link)
I voted for Just Remus. This is mainly because I'm really enjoying his POV here and don't want it to stop. You can always include the others' perspectives through conversation, although dialogue-based exposition can sometimes be awkward. (You know that, though, I don't need to give you advice!)

I was actually surprised to hear that you were considering shifting viewpoints, but that's just because I've been reading this over the last few weeks, rather than all in one sitting, so it seems longer to me than it actually is.
fernwithy From: fernwithy Date: June 20th, 2004 08:32 pm (UTC) (Link)
Yeah, we're only at the end of Harry's first week back at school--the story will eventually encompass the whole OotP year. :)

Well, I was originally going to use all three of them, then I realized I desperately wanted Remus to narrate various events here that would be happening one after another, so I went with him. But with him going AWOL for a night to howl at the moon, the structure is open again for the last time. Basically, I'm wondering if I should go back to what I originally thought of and then rejected.
mafdet From: mafdet Date: June 20th, 2004 08:58 pm (UTC) (Link)
I'd love to hear the POV's of both Sirius and Dora as well. I don't think one has to stick with the same POV as the canon, as long as one keeps the characters in character and the setting recognizable. I myself have very very very seldom used one POV throughout an entire multi-chaptered work. (I am trying to do this with my original WIP but with fanfic I find it hard if not impossible. I like variety.)
From: lnevans Date: June 21st, 2004 11:11 am (UTC) (Link)
*icon love* Avid Remus/Tonks girl here...where'd you get your icon??
mafdet From: mafdet Date: June 21st, 2004 11:33 am (UTC) (Link)
My icon is courtesy of friede who does some lovely R/T artwork.
From: lnevans Date: June 21st, 2004 01:51 pm (UTC) (Link)
Awesome. Thanks!
mafdet From: mafdet Date: June 21st, 2004 02:05 pm (UTC) (Link)
By the way, are you the same as "Lillian Evans" who is on the Wotcher Wolvie over at FA? I'm on there too, as Clarimonde (aka She Who Named the Lupinlets). I had to use a different username here.
From: lnevans Date: June 21st, 2004 03:01 pm (UTC) (Link)
Aha! Yep. That's me! And of course I know who you are, Clarimonde (wow, I had to restrain myself from using the [b] there 'cause I'm so used to it, stupid FAP html-ing)! I've been trying to find the LJs of fellow Wotcher Wolviers!! Coincidences galore!
sreya From: sreya Date: June 20th, 2004 09:12 pm (UTC) (Link)
Voted for keeping it with just Remus. I think for the particular story you've started, it works best structurally. As for Sirius, it's almost more poignant that we catch only glimpses of what he's going through, and through his friend's eyes.

For Remus & Dora -- again, I feel like structurally, it's been working well with only Remus. Dora's expressive enough that we can see quite a bit of what her POV is even without having it directly written, just through her actions and words, and this way we get Remus's filtering on it all. Which is of course a very good filter for dramatic irony and tension. :)
From: anatomiste Date: June 20th, 2004 09:25 pm (UTC) (Link)
And I second all of that!
sonetka From: sonetka Date: June 20th, 2004 09:59 pm (UTC) (Link)
I'm awfully tempted by the thought of hearing something from Sirius' perspective, but that might kind of run out of possibilities after a while. I mean, the guy can't leave his house (not officially, anyway ... I'm sure he went out for a few laps as Snuffles when he thought he could get away with it). Dora comes through loud and clear. So count another vote for just Remus - for a werewolf, he's awfully popular :).
liebchen127 From: liebchen127 Date: June 21st, 2004 06:05 am (UTC) (Link)
I really like Sirius very much (you know that), but I voted for "just Remus" because I think it's better for the story. My trust in Remus is great because I happen to know that Remus is a very good and sensitive observer and I trust he will tell us a lot of things about Sirius and Dora ;))))
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