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These Are The Names, Chapter 15 - The Phantom Librarian — LiveJournal
Spewing out too many words since November 2003
fernwithy
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These Are The Names, Chapter 15
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fernwithy From: fernwithy Date: June 18th, 2014 05:22 am (UTC) (Link)

Re: Feedback/catches

I think I'll leave the comma out of "the shoemakers' daughter," since its place in the list just makes it look like Delly and the shoemakers' daughter are different children. It's technically correct to have the comma (since she's the only daughter), but in the interest of clarity, I'll leave it out this time.

All those missing words were after I had gone over it. My head just supplies them when I read along, so it's incredibly valuable to me that you pick them out.

I think Haymitch loves his district, no matter how much it seems to alienate and frustrate him. It's where he's from and who he is.

It's definitely too late at this point for Snow to salvage the Haymitch situation by allowing him to have someone to love, but yes... how utterly stupid to let it get to this point. Imagine, a smart and sober Haymitch with people around him who matter to him, and with opportunities to use that overactive brain.

Then again, if the dictators of the Capitol had any brains, they wouldn't practically guarantee another rebellion by murdering district children as entertainment every year.

I think Finnick's situation may be clear before he tells the others, but yes, part of it is most likely being shamed into thinking that it's his own fault somehow, that he "let" people think this about him, that he he doesn't fight back even though he's capable, that he does it out of fear. The others don't push him to tell because it's his choice what to share or not share with them, and he'll tell them when he's ready... but of course, something like that, it probably needed prodding.


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