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The Phantom Librarian
Spewing out too many words since November 2003
These Are The Names, Chapter 21
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fernwithy From: fernwithy Date: July 10th, 2014 05:21 am (UTC) (Link)

Re: Feedback and Some Catches


As far as I was taught, splitting dialogue up into paragraphs, you don't use the close quote, just the open one, to indicate ongoing dialogue.

I'm on board with a nice future, too. Alas, poor nice futures.

The antibiotics are on the way, but it took Plutarch a while to convince them not to charge for them, plus the time it took them to realize that it was plague they were dealing with.

Cinna is really just getting started, and Portia's the girl he's itching to get as an apprentice. I'm not sure if Effie ever totally appreciates his aesthetic outside of the parade costumes.
torturedbabycow From: torturedbabycow Date: July 10th, 2014 07:27 pm (UTC) (Link)

Re: Feedback and Some Catches

I just had a thought about Effie's reaction to Cinna's work... she made some comment about how she thought she'd feel more "naked" in some of the designs even though they show less skin. I wonder if her reaction ties in a little bit with her PTSD about the wig incident. Like, she's clearly taken to wigs and fashion as a sort of armor against the outside world, and her past experiences make it her feel extra uncomfortable in public not in "full fashion armor." But the thing about a lot of ridiculous fashion is that it treats the human body as sort of an afterthought, just an inconveniently squishy and variable display mannequin. On the other hand, Cinna seems to have more of an "organic" approach to fashion, where the body and person wearing the clothes are integral to the whole enterprise. So for Effie, that would actually undermine her use of fashion as a barrier between her and the world, and give a sort of uncomfortable and "naked" feeling.
fernwithy From: fernwithy Date: July 11th, 2014 06:00 am (UTC) (Link)

Re: Feedback and Some Catches

It's a good point. Effie as described in the books, and especially as seen in the movies, may as well be in plated armor with the face mask down on the helmet.
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