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The Last Tribute: Chapter One
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From: queen_bellatrix Date: August 8th, 2014 04:42 am (UTC) (Link)


Air holes Just the missing period.:)

idea out hand Think you're missing an of before hand.

with detective Think you're missing an a before detective.

But the there's Think maybe you can delete the the, unless there was supposed to be more to that sentence?

once before getting Think maybe you need a comma after before, and there may be a missing word or two; I can't quite tell?

your favor!' Just need to make that ' a closing quote.

insist that there Think maybe the insist should be insisted?

Ah, it is good to be back in Haymitch's head! This entire chapter is proof of Finn's assertion in that challenge with Jo about just how much Haymitch can do/process, even smashed. Which, y'know, just makes it worse that he's smashed, because of all he could accomplish if he weren't. *fumes*

Your inclusion of Drake's old phrase about backing tributes' plays was fantasticly done. We've seen Haymitch, through the other fics, back plays, and do his best to teach/help. But, I think this is the first time he's explicitly put it in those terms; what he felt with his first tributes has become one of the most profound parts of his moral code. And all his thoughts about Prim nearly made me cry; mentoring twelve-year-olds must be an especial kind of hell. I remember being Twelve; when I was especially scared, I was still known to curl as close to my Mom as humanly possible. To have to sit and watch these kids, and know they were going to die without their parents, or anyone they were really close too (I know they know the victors from their Districts, but I'd imagine it's often more a case of know of than know.); all you could really do would be to give them a hug if they were scared, and make sure they got the largest piece of cake. The futility, knowing they just didn't have the physical prowess to compete...I can't even imagine. And the detail about the shelves in the casket somehow made it about a hundred times worse. Also really loved how Prim was described; keeping her head up, etc. etc., because the brave ones would almost be worse when you knew it wouldn't do any good.

And Finn; you hit the bullseye once again with the insights about victors. I just love the idea of them finding fairly thin pretexts to meet, because they just need community. I think sometimes Haymitch, being so isolated, forgets that while the other rebels may have other victors, there's no garuntee they share their sympathies, which leaves them tremendously isolated in a huge part of their work/life.

The glimpse of Effie and Haymitch's thoughts afterwords was infuriating; especially how much he's pickled himself since her re-education. I know a lot of details we got in TANT may've slipped his mind even before her stint in CD; but, I imagine a lot of it happened afterword, which is horrifying. And the bit about not being able to have a family; I love how you're playing with how much is imposed on people by societal constraints, and how much is choice. I realize Haymitch may be entirely right, but I can't help wondering how much of it is a way to rationalize not getting sober; wouldn't matter, because he'd never have a life anyway, that sort of thing.

And seriously, Blight, were you either drunk or on morfling? Because honey, I get that Gia/Finn's situation is messing with your head, but *headdesk* So, I'm assuming that when half the rebels went awall the spring before the 70th, they were going to hear the proposal Blight already had set up? Which I'm assuming was more like: I have a glorious plan and all of you should be happy than: Let'stalk to these people, or the Raiders crazy would've become obvious far sooner?

A couple of smaller things that struck me: I loved Haymitch's passion for detective novels; just such a fun bit of world-building. And for all that Chaff's much more of an extravert than Haymitch, I find it interesting that he is, in a lot of ways, far more cynical about the Capitol; just a really clever contrast, because you'd think it'd be reversed.

And oh, Haymitch; backing Kattniss's play'll be easy enough, but backing Peeta's, especially when he starts to like him outside of being Danny's kid is going to be so hard; I bet there's at least one point when he curses his and Cinna's plan so much.

fernwithy From: fernwithy Date: August 8th, 2014 06:02 am (UTC) (Link)

Re: Catches/Squee!

Glad you noticed the hark back to Drake. He actually did turn out to be Haymitch's mentor, after all.

The hell of seeing not just a twelve-year-old, but a small, fragile looking one... man. I imagined it, but I didn't want to.

I loved Catching Fire because of this very weird, wild family that the victors made together. If they weren't rebelling, I still think they'd have found ways to get together outside the Games. They have an experience that very few people do.

Haymitch really has shut off his feelings about Effie, and he doesn't even have the excuse of being brainwashed. He's just hurt, and does the thing he does when he's hurt: Pulls away.

I think Blight's thought wasn't a bad one, and no one really told him to put the brakes on, but the raiders weren't the free-spirits he imagined. They were vicious criminals. The argument at the lake was ultimately about whether the rebellion should find a way to keep the Capitol from annihilating them (since they were the ones who invited them to "rebel") or just let it happen (since the raiders were distinctly not going along with the rebels' plans).

I just think Haymitch would dig Sherlock Holmes.

When it comes to the Capitol, all I can think of is that in D12, Haymitch never would have had access to anything, really. The Capitol lets him take (some) classes, read (some) books, and indulge his random interests. It has things that occasionally challenge his mind. And it has the people he cares about. Chaff still has people he cares about in Eleven, and his district has had a tougher boot on its neck.

Before he gets to how to back Peeta's play, he's going to have to deal with Danny.
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