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The Last Tribute: Chapter Thirteen - The Phantom Librarian — LiveJournal
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The Last Tribute: Chapter Thirteen
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fernwithy From: fernwithy Date: September 21st, 2014 06:06 am (UTC) (Link)

Re: Catches

Aagh, on the continuity catch. :eyeroll: I just forgot I'd ever mentioned it!

A couple of the mentioned commas would make too much of a break in the sentence (comma=mental pause), so I let them go, but I got the rest.
From: queen_bellatrix Date: September 21st, 2014 07:32 am (UTC) (Link)

Re: Catches

Sorry if this is a duel post; LJ's been persnickety lately!

I love your dream sequences! Although, there's something indescribably sad that even in his own subconscious, Haymitch's reached a point where he can't imagine another life for himself. So often, to achieve clarity for the reader with dreams, it feels as though the characters are retreading ground for the reader's sake, but this never did.

I loved your explanation for why Peeta made the suggestion he did to the Careers; oh, honey, you would've been in so much less pain come the next day if that had worked.

And oh, Marvel. There's something deeply sad at seeing him so repulsed by something he will later do; a really excellent foreshadowing example of how the arena breaks people.

There is something so viscerally satisfying about seeing Haymitch start to consider relying on a larger network again. He was just starting to in HT, and then his tour/first year happened, and everything went to hell; there's something almost giddy about knowing how spectacularly it's going to succeed this time, and this is one of the places where all the prequel bits are paying off beautifully!

One of the greatest lines from the last chapter was Haymitch's thought that he was the most sadistic bastard of them all, and it became even more fabulous in retrospect with what you did here. You've always had a wonderfully sharp divide between "You think like a Gamemaker" and "You are like a Gamemaker." even if Haymitch hasn't always seen the divide as clearly as the readers. But it was in especially sharp relief here, with his caveat of if he's willing when he's thinking about Finn. No one who was like a Gamemaker would think that.

Mm, now that you pointed it out, I'm now very interested to see what the hell Plutarch was playing at. And I'm beginning to wonder if he thought, with all the Gamemakers and Snow gunning for her, she really didn't have a chance. I mean, sure, let the pin in the arena, but don't go out on any limbs; just let the Games play out, and if she wins, then that early gamble will pay off, and if she doesn't, oh well, no harm, no foul.

I loved the moment where Kattniss thanked Haymitch; it was a wonderful moment in the books, and the pov switch made it so much more so. Though, again, there is something so wrong with the fact that no Tributes, barring Elmer in the 51st, have ever said thank you. (I'm guessing Haymitch didn't think of that one because it was so brief; it was thank you, but it didn't carry the feeling Kattniss's did?)

And I like the cast you're assembling behind the scenes! I'm especially giddy over Cecilia, Aquila, Finn, Caesar, and Seeder!:d Especially because two of them really deserve moments to shine, considering what Snow does the next year.:(

There were so many lines I loved, but I especially loved Haymitch's: bizarre playtime, and the way you described the Careers "trampling down" the woods. Just really well-done, morbidly funny turns of phrase.

And lest I forget: Maysilee's "You don't tie your shoes together with packing string anymore, Haymitch. You're not sixteen, you're not poor, and you're not powerless." I've been wanting to saythat since somewhere around the middle/end of EOTW, and hearing someone finally do it in the text was glorious; clapping ensued!

And speaking of great lines, I never got a chance to comment on Finn's great rejoinder to Brutus about going to see a therapist for his death wish, but that was brilliant. I love how you're developing this snark of Finn's; it's not as obvious as Haymitch's, but it's quietly devastating in its own way when he decides to turn it on someone.

Also, what a fantastic way to have the comentators pair Kattniss and Rue after the fire (fantastic in conception, not outcome) I love how they're trying to defang her in anticipation of her death; at least, I'm assuming that's what Snow and the higher level Gamemakers are planning: Make her sacrifice have no power and then kill her in the most brutal way possible with the showdown with Cato? No more Haymitch's, under any circumstances. Which now makes me want a short fic about how they were spinning Haymitch in his Games, from the pov of someone in the viewing center/what the behind the scenes macinations were regarding what the hell to do about him.
fernwithy From: fernwithy Date: September 21st, 2014 08:03 am (UTC) (Link)

Re: Catches

Oh, no I got it... I forgot that I hadn't answered it.

What Marvel does to Rue is pretty cowardly -- it's one thing when it's little fourteen-year-old Finnick against the bigger tributes; it's another entirely when it's an eighteen year old boy against a small twelve year old girl. But at the same time, it's the sort of thing that I feel like someone who's uncomfortable with the Games (and uncomfortable with his discomfort) might do. It's impersonal. Set a trap on one end, then let the person fall into it.

I think Haymitch probably wasn't even thinking about Elmer. He's spent the last 24 years convincing himself that he's been useless. Elmer's thank you would stick with him less than Elmer being eaten by a lion.

Haymitch really has been stuck in arrested development for a long time. I think he knows it, and in Maysilee's voice, hes' trying to tell himself to grow up. Which he does need to do.

Defanging Katniss was almost certainly a major point of concern, once they realized that she was going to make a real go of it (and when they realized how popular she was on the street). Turning her into a silly girl in a sparkly dress would have been very effective if she'd obliged by dying in the next few hours. Unfortunately for the Capitol, she easily dodged that particular fireball.

Plutarch may not have had much choice in the attack. He's not head Gamemaker yet. Of course, Haymitch imputes great power to him, much more than he might have even the next year.
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