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Poetry game - The Phantom Librarian
Spewing out too many words since November 2003
fernwithy
fernwithy
Poetry game
I got this out of an Orson Scott Card column, and I'm not sure I can make it work without paper to fold over, but I want to give it a try anyway. On paper, the way it goes is that the starter writes a line, then passes the paper along to the next person, who writes a rhyming line, then a non-rhyming line that continues the "theme" of the poem. Then the person folds the paper over, hiding the original couplet, and passes it to the next person, who just writes a rhyme for the visible line, then another non-rhyming line to continue the "theme" (which is likely to be a bit changed, given that there's no good clue of what it is!). That person folds it over and hides the rhyming couplet, and passes the non-rhymed line to the next person, who writes a rhyme, then a non-rhymed thematic continuation, and so on, until the paper is full, at which point, someone reads the result aloud, dramatically. Obviously, that part isn't going to work, but I bet we could get some couplets going.

So, I'll write a single line. First commenter can read my line, then write a rhyme for it, and a non-rhymed continuation... but several lines under it, like this...

Here's my little starting line

First comment
And here's a little starting rhyme




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To go into the silly game


Second comment (and all subsequent).... do not read anything but the last line of the previous comment until you've made your contribution. Honor system here. To make it easier not to read back, white out the text, with a non-whited out area to signal (like the asterisks) where the second line begins (use [font color="#ffffff"]....[/font], except with angle brackets instead of square ones). Just highlight the lower line to respond.

Once the comments seem to have stopped coming in, I'll post the "poem" as it turns out.

'Kay?

Starting line (highlight to read if it's not clear on the gray... and only after you've made post):

The sun was shining at the shore

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sreya From: sreya Date: May 8th, 2006 03:01 pm (UTC) (Link)
(hope I'm first, otherwise there'll be 2 poems going!)

1***The water stretching evermore





2***And their marks were in the sand

Oops, preview helps!
ashavah From: ashavah Date: May 8th, 2006 03:17 pm (UTC) (Link)
3*** Stretching to horizon grand






4*** Underneath the glitt'ring stars


Hee. This is fun.
olympe_maxime From: olympe_maxime Date: May 8th, 2006 03:27 pm (UTC) (Link)
5**** On looping roads ran glittering cars,





6**** Whirring, humming, the night's air thrumming
From: tree_and_leaf Date: May 8th, 2006 04:09 pm (UTC) (Link)
7****
Filled with the sound of frantic drumming


8********
Passersby stop to stand and stare,
marycontraria From: marycontraria Date: May 8th, 2006 05:01 pm (UTC) (Link)
9***And wonder at the marvels there



10***They stand in awe and dream grand dreams
antonia_east From: antonia_east Date: May 8th, 2006 05:31 pm (UTC) (Link)
11***Of winter's kiss and summer's beams



12***Until at last the dreams run dry
jetamors From: jetamors Date: May 8th, 2006 06:26 pm (UTC) (Link)
13*** And hope is shown to be a lie

14*** Despair is all they've left to us
purple_ladybug1 From: purple_ladybug1 Date: May 8th, 2006 07:13 pm (UTC) (Link)
15*** Gone are our illusions of trust

16*** No more shall we laugh and play
erised1810 From: erised1810 Date: May 8th, 2006 07:22 pm (UTC) (Link)

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17. we shall keep our love at bay
'til the cold wind blows no more

the_jackalope From: the_jackalope Date: May 8th, 2006 08:21 pm (UTC) (Link)
19**And you have learned the Fairy lore

20**To rescue townships from this plight,
harriet_wimsey From: harriet_wimsey Date: May 8th, 2006 08:32 pm (UTC) (Link)
21He rode on bravely through the night.

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22The army marched with angry tread
hermia7 From: hermia7 Date: May 8th, 2006 09:15 pm (UTC) (Link)
23 through mud-slicked fields, cold-drenched with dread,

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24 and though the cloudy billows grew
glishara From: glishara Date: May 8th, 2006 10:54 pm (UTC) (Link)
25 and sparked with light, and fury blew

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26 into the icy sheath of night,
disturbed_kiwi From: disturbed_kiwi Date: May 8th, 2006 11:13 pm (UTC) (Link)
27 lightning made the clouds glow white

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28 And a traveller held her candle high
affabletoaster From: affabletoaster Date: May 9th, 2006 12:56 am (UTC) (Link)
29[font color="#ffffff"]To blind the face, to bind the lie.[/font]

~-~

30[font color="#ffffff"]The shadows stole from wav'ring flame,[/font]
matril From: matril Date: May 9th, 2006 01:13 am (UTC) (Link)
31Illuminate the face of blame.

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32And never spurn the piercing gaze,
aeterna13 From: aeterna13 Date: May 9th, 2006 01:20 am (UTC) (Link)
32 Which uninvited questions raised.,

33 The truth, that which these questions seek,

fernwithy From: fernwithy Date: May 9th, 2006 01:54 am (UTC) (Link)
Tying it off:

34 In oceans where the waters speak.
ashavah From: ashavah Date: May 8th, 2006 03:18 pm (UTC) (Link)
Normal comment, contains poem spoiler: Heh. I made the first continuity gaffe ... *giggles*

;-p

Yours,

JK
olympe_maxime From: olympe_maxime Date: May 8th, 2006 03:22 pm (UTC) (Link)
Line 1: Twisting shells, reaching for land -





Line 2: Burning the sands into clay.
olympe_maxime From: olympe_maxime Date: May 8th, 2006 03:28 pm (UTC) (Link)
Shoot, somebody got to the first commenter's line 2 just as I was typing this one. Can this be the second poem?
fernwithy From: fernwithy Date: May 8th, 2006 04:02 pm (UTC) (Link)
Let's stick with one for now!
purple_ladybug1 From: purple_ladybug1 Date: May 8th, 2006 07:16 pm (UTC) (Link)
This is fun! I can't wait to read the finished poem.

P.S. It took me a couple of tries to write in white. :O
erised1810 From: erised1810 Date: May 8th, 2006 07:26 pm (UTC) (Link)

ot

Since I'm blind I don't know if the white worked on my contribution.
by theway if you want to make code visible in a post you type can & sign directly followed by lt (For less han) gt (for greater than) just like the asci stuff. <lj user="fernwithy">
I hope that came out right too. just wanted to share because once I found that out I found it very handy.
fernwithy From: fernwithy Date: May 8th, 2006 08:39 pm (UTC) (Link)

Re: ot

Your white-out worked fine. Interesting point. I'll try that sometime!
aeterna13 From: aeterna13 Date: May 9th, 2006 01:28 am (UTC) (Link)
Wow, it's really fascinating to see where this poem has gone. Cool game! :)
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