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Chapter 31 of Shades ("Comfort Food") is up, with some continuity… - The Phantom Librarian
Spewing out too many words since November 2003
Chapter 31 of Shades ("Comfort Food") is up, with some continuity and spelling fixes, removal of a random fragment of conversation that never went anywhere (Kingsley talking about going to the forest with Tonks, which I promptly forgot about and would have messed up the plot point anyway). I went back into "Drift of Azaleas" and repaired the Black family names, though it occurred to me after I sent it that by putting in the right death date for Sirius's father, I've now made the next line senseless, since it implies that Sirius hadn't known that his father died, even though that would have been two years before he was in Azkaban. Maybe no one told him that his father died the same year as Regulus? (Ugh, weak. Oh, well. I'll figure it out. Wish I didn't have to bother other people to post repairs.)

I realized that I dropped a thread in both Shifts and Shades that was connected to "Azaleas," mostly because it never fit. Maybe I'll write a little backstory piece about Walburga.
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alkari From: alkari Date: January 15th, 2007 07:02 am (UTC) (Link)
Yes, that cursedly fascinating Black family tree. I've always wondered whether Sirius was told about his father's death, and whether he went to the funeral (I suspect not). And also whether they told him about his mother's death, because of course he was in Azkaban when she died.
fernwithy From: fernwithy Date: January 15th, 2007 07:13 am (UTC) (Link)
Even if he wasn't told, they're a rich, prominent family--it would probably be in the society papers, so he'd find out one way or the other. (Granted, he wouldn't be the one reading them, but someone else would, and would probably take him aside and say, "Sirius, there's something you need to know...") Unless, of course, his death itself was hidden for some reason.
shimotsuki From: shimotsuki Date: January 15th, 2007 03:34 pm (UTC) (Link)
I read "Shifts" the first time before I'd read "Azaleas," so it wasn't until I later reread the Transfiguration duel scene in "Shifts" that I understood Dora's comments about the odd smell and Sirius's attitude toward the parlor. *shudders, but in a good way*

Anyway, I've been debating with myself whether to leave this comment somewhere or not, and hopefully this is a reasonably appropriate place. I loved reading your 2006 holiday challenge posts about the Smeltings teachers, and it made go back and reread their cameos in "Shades". A couple of things about the Harrington-on-Sea sequence occurred to me, and I guess I will note them here just in case anything is useful as you get ready to post more chapters to SQ.

In chapter 36, part 3, the first time Remus sees the flat, it was furnished sparsely, but Dora seemed to have set up a card table, and they took their seats in beach chairs around it. But then in Ch 40, part 1, he'd scrounged the beach chairs out of storage on the landlady's permission -- maybe this should be, "and Dora had..."?

The other thing I wondered about: Luckily for Dora, none of the Smeltings crowd recognized her in her unmorphed state. But should it have occurred to her to worry about being recognized when they first turned up? Not only would Miriam know her if the memory charm from the St. Mungo's visit failed, but even Alan and Anna could potentially have recognized her as the young "Dora" they saw at the Ren Faire.

Thanks for posting those holiday drabbles, by the way -- they were a great extra present.
erised1810 From: erised1810 Date: January 15th, 2007 07:41 pm (UTC) (Link)
I've reda 'a drit of azaleas' last week adn I didn't give a sack about psosibly seeign the wrong first names. the biggest ponts that came across for me were the way sirius felt and the state the hosue was in and so forth. it's another example of how good yo uare with setting a chilling mood (like in 'voices').

o hadn i've read requiem for a rat.
adn the one where ginn ygets alpha bet lessons. bah. i've waited far too long with this. i fel liek you'reall sitting there determiend to ride the caroussel unti lboo kseven is over and doen with and I jsut enteredte theme park forthe firsttime to lok aroudn for real and find some favourite rides.
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